Aki-chan's Life
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A visit to the Grandparents - "This is where Mama came from?" - 150
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No, there's no continuity error on this page (unless you count added shadow and beeping). ;)
As some already figured out, the visit may not go that smoothly. Got to admit, we might going to have a bit of a retcon here, albeit a minor one. It's not going to be to the extend that I feel I'd need to rewrite anything in T2t. ;)
That said, I actually did a bit of a re-read myself recently. Kinda funny how much you can forget about your own stuff, I actually didn't even remember some scenes until I saw them again. ^^
Also noticed quite a few spelling mistakes and awkward/wrong vocabulary (not even sure if I'd still go with First/Second/Third Children these days anymore - as much as I defended that and still works as a title IMO, it is a bit awkward to read in an English text) - but I'm not sure if I really want to open that can of worms to go back and edit all that. ^^
That said, one thing that bothered me a bit that I could potentially see touching again: The illustrations. Granted, they were originally meant as a bit of an additional draw to get readers (since some other "big" stories had them), which turned out wasn't really needed, as it still got somewhat popular. But it still feels a bit off that the short first chapter has two (could have sworn it were three, but I guess I never cleaned/colored that sketch of the Leliel aftermath) and then there's only like four spread over the remaining 12.
So my question to you: Are there any particular scenes that you would like to see illustrated? I'm not making any promises either way, available time on my end aside, I would have to see if that wouldn't disturb the "flow" or spoil too much if one were to scroll too far. But it would be interesting to see what would be of interest.
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